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Course, Subject

English Language Arts, English Language Arts (NYS P-12 Common Core)

Introduction

The students will learn to edit and revise a rough draft for final grading. To ingrain the editing process, the students will edit while narrating their thought processes during a video capture.

Essential Question

What are some possible methods of revising or editing your paper?

Objectives

The students will revise a rough draft using a microphone to tape their thoughts on why they are changing words or rewriting sentences.

Procedure

Step 1: Assign the rough draft homework. (digital document)

• The student can choose to write a memoir of a person, memoir of a place, or memoir of an eyewitness account.
• The class will read over the examples of each of the exemplar papers.
• The class will individually make a graphic organizer and list things they can write about under each option.
• The class will choose one of the listed items and make a graphic organizer that includes the details that should be included in the paper.
• Students have a week to complete the assignment.

Step 2: (one week later) The students will turn in their printed rough drafts. (grade the rough drafts for 4 specific areas - MLA heading, apostrophe usage, capital letter usage, and paragraphing)

Step 3: The papers are returned to their owners and the class is taken to the technology lab to set up with head sets and learn how to record their responses as they revise their papers.

1. Students will log into a computer.
2. Then open the electronic version of their document.
3. They will have a printed version of their draft with the editing comments.
4. Each will be given a headset with microphones and explained how to plug them in.
5. Then they are shown the recording application (We used the SMART recorder that comes with the SMART Board software. Another option would be to use Jing.) and are asked to do a quick test recording to make sure their microphones and headset are working.
6. Then they are told to make electronic corrections to their document narrating what they are doing and why they are doing it.
7. About 8 minutes before the period ends, you want to have them save the video because it takes time to process. Once they have saved it with their name they put it into the teacher's public folder dropbox.
8. They then will drop their video recordings into the teacher's dropbox. The revised papers will be collected and graded as well as the recording in the overall final grade.

Student Work

Students will create a rough draft, a narrated video of their corrects, and a final product.

sample low.pdf   video

 

sample med.pdf  video

 

sample high.pdf   video

Assessment

Draft score sheet
draft.docx

Project with rubric...see attached.
tech writing rubric.docx

Instructional and Environmental Modifications

Instructional = aid Environmental = computer lab, projector, etc.

Duration

Step 1  - 40 mins.
Step 2  - 5 mins. (May take some time to grade all of the rough drafts.)
Step 3 - 40 mins.

Related Academic Standards

New York State

9-10W1f Maintain a style and tone appropriate to the writing task.

9-10W2c Use precise language and content-specific vocabulary to express the appropriate complexity of a topic.

9-10W2f Establish and maintain a style appropriate to the writing task.

9-10W5 Draw evidence from literary or informational texts to support analysis, reflection, and research. Apply grade 9/10 Reading standards to both literary and informational text, where applicable.

9-10L3 Apply knowledge of language to understand how language functions in different contexts, to make effective choices for meaning or style, and to comprehend more fully when reading or listening.

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